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It is a purple haze
that licks at the clenched muscles in her
jaw.
Biting,
sipping,
caressing her chewed finger tips
    (he slit the flesh so that you could
       see the red,
           red fire, smouldering flesh)
Until you could feel the rancid smell of roasting meat.

He played the drums quite well,
with large metal spikes he played,
     the eardrums,
tearing the skin so slowly,
        “oh, so slowly!”

Locked in a room he
danced with the key,
an orange hot red rod,
and it swayed
back and forth
and back and
forth a little more.
So it was running together, oozing together,
from his pores.


And his pupils – gnawing at her toes so long,
“oh, so long!”
so fucking spiders crawled out of them and
spun a web.
        and white webs
around her.
Until his retina wouldn’t give and he
bled out of his eyes.

As a corpse she lay there now
and lied back then.
So when her words rang true,
the bells inside would ring some louder,
sing inside,
so her bones would shatter and crumble and fall
to ashes in a staggering pain so that she knew,
“she got her blue eyes from her dad”.
©2005-2009 ~AnJeWeL-FaCe-
:iconanjewel-face-:

Author's Comments

Wrote this in 8 random minutes, needz some fixing up.
I'll be interested to see what you think.

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:icontharaka:
hmm, thats quite powerful
:iconlillivinganime:
Gah, I love your poems. o___o That was really good! :+fav:
:iconteamragnarok:
This is good. Quite powerful. :+fav:
:iconchase-the-roo:
wow.......

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some things are far too good to go away~~
:iconxblackheartedangelx:
umm...

i think you forgot to take your medicine :pills:

haha im kidding...:love:

baby, i love you, but this is so weird....good! but weird...

where did it come from?

haha i really like it even tho i have no idea what its about :P youll have to explain it to me when you COME TO MY HOUSE you should come for spring break :dance:
:iconanjewel-face-:
LOL yes i think i did sorry... ill EXPLAIN IT TO YOU NOW CUZ UR SPECIAL :P

ok.. so... the purple haze is supposed to represent her father being high, and that she can't escape from him cuz it licks and bites and etc... "chewed fingertips" - she chews her fingernails cuz shes nervous all the time and she chews them bcuz of HIM so HE slit the flesh when she chews on them so long that she begins to bleed... so when it goes "red, red fire, smouldering flesh", it's a little play with the punctutaion cuz it could be
"red, red fire, smouldering (the) flesh"
"red, red fire smouldering flesh"
red, red fire, smouldering flesh" where they are all sepperate listings. the whole fire thing cuz he burn her i.e. hurts her and scars her that way... and that goes onm for so long that u can even FEEL the smell... u know? :P so when it goes "he played the drums quite well, with large metal spikes" it's talking about how he yells at her cuz he plays on her eardrums for o long that they tear but slowly so it's more painful... and it doesn't rly tear but u know ;P Sooo... "ölocke din a room he danced with the key..." he locks her into rooms and it's as if he scurtinzses hurr by rubbing it in that he has power and she doesn't... cuz HE has THE KEY... so the whole "and orange red rod swaying back and forth"... it's supposed to be like a souldering iron... painful and leaving marks and all... and the back and forth is cuz it repeats itself over n over agen until she's numb... "his pupils - gnawing..." is supposed to portray the way he watches her while making her suffer and he does that for so long that her inside (HER SOUL) is rotten and spiders come out of it... so then they spin a web over her so that she is LIKE A CORPSE (or mummy (sp)) symbolising the emotional death within her... "she lay there now and lied back then" - how she lied about her problem with her father etc... so that even when she did say the truth or wanted to, she'd be so scared of her father that her soul cwas bruised some more... and hence at the end she dies emotionally because it all falls appart... sooooo she is reminded every day that she got her blue eyes from her dad - blue eyes = the bruises she gets form him hitting her...

TADA i hope it makes a bit more sense... its ALLLLLLLLL over the place but eeeeh :D

--
You're a slave to money and then you die

(¯`•..•`¯)AnJeWeL-fAcE-(¯`•..•`¯)
:iconxblackheartedangelx:
o wow....

i was just talking to amber about this poem and i TOLD her that there was more to it then it seemed, i just wasnt catching on to it...

thats the SEX! wooo, i was going to fave it before, but it made more sense to wait til i knew what it was all about before...soo haha to faaave i gooo :giggle:
:iconezzen16:
o, oh, thats so powerfull u used metaphors to the best of anyone i have ever known,
thats amazing thats great thats just im speechless

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Luv ya, take care
ERin

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